Draft #3 of ETD: Status update 1

ETD are the initials of my new title for the YA novel I’m revising. I don’t feel comfortable making titles public while I’m in the process of drafting, but it’s a little misleading to just call it “my YA novel,” since four of my novels fall into that category.

After doing a ton of untangling between drafts one and two, I expected this round of revision to go a bit more smoothly. But I feel as if I’m untangling wet hair after not using conditioner in the shower–and you might need to have my family’s curly-hair genes to fully appreciate that analogy.

How much can I rearrange the same paragraph? Oh, let me count the ways . . .